Reading through our treatment with our teacher it started to become clear that we would have difficulty creating a good structural trailer so we decided to keep the initial idea but change the way we set it slightly.
So our new treatment keeps with the idea of a spirit and haunting but is in a way that we can see a good trailer emerging from it.
New Treatment: Three friends (all girls) are driving out in the woods to have a few drinks and just to have fun. It starts to get dark now and the car unfortunately wont start.
The girls walk towards a large house and see if they can stay the night there. No one is in this house and the furniture is covered by white sheets. The girls realise that the house is abandoned and stay the night.
The girls then start to explore the house. None of the phones work.
One girl tries to open one of the doors but it is locked. She struggles to open it but notice's someone or something is in that room, as the door opens the girl walks through and sees that this is the room of a little girl, however nothing has been touched almost as if this is a shrine to whoever owned this room.
The girl calls her friends and as she does this picks up one of the teddies on the little girls bed, suddenly there is a flash of white light and the girl sees this little girl playing with the teddy. The teddy drops and she now sees two adults standing over a grave. The vision ends there and the girl is taken back to the room. In shock she drops the teddy.
From then on strange paranormal activity starts to occur and the girls experience some very strange events.
Strange Events:We discussed a few ideas for our strange scenes and we feel that these our the key scenes we would want in our trailer.
1) Establishing shot of the woods.
Car drives up through the woods.
Close up on tyres.
Establishing girls in the car and they get out with alcohol in there hands.
They wander through the woods
Gets dark
See house and open the door.
2) Exploring house and find a locked door.
Tries to open it - pushing the door.
Looks under the door and sees foot steps.
Looks through the keyhole and there is an eye looking back.
Jumps back, turns around to shout for her friends and the door swings open.
3) Takes a teddy from the bed.
Flash or white light.
Sees girl playing with teddy.
Teddy drops.
Parents by the grave.
Back to room/Drops the teddy.
4) Exploring the girls room more
Finds a music box, opens it to hear music.
5) Another friend pulls a sheet off a mirror.
(Nothing there) Girl looks into the mirror
Little girl walks past the door behind her.
6) Lights cut out.
Light switch not working
The friends are all downstairs together
They hear the music box being played upstairs
Little girl walks from one place and appears in the other.
Trailer: Our basic trailer idea (Not complete) :
-Establishing shot of the woods and house.
-Girls mucking around in the woods and the drive up.
-Gets dark & the car wont start.
-Find a house - no one is there.
-Shots of them individually exploring the house
-Strange event with the locked door and the keyhole scenes that is involved there.
-Sheets being taken off
-Bussing sequences
-Lights not working
-Weird events happening
-Music box being played
-Bussing sequences
-Doors slamming
-Windows jammed, Cant get out of the house.
Idea for the ending:Panning out from house. Daylight. Music box music playing. Car messed up (Doors and bonnet open). Little girl skips/Crawls towards the camera giggling.
